It Pays to Edit

The New Yorker, once known for its excruciating attention to detail, could use some editing help. A good editor might’ve avoided this repetitive sentence in “Streaming Dreams,” an article about YouTube.

How might editing fix this? Consider that you’re stuck with the “pay” in “PayPal” because it’s a proper name, so you need to remove the other two instances, perhaps like this:

The founders had no outside financing at the time. They used Chen’s credit card and profits from eBay’s 2002 buyout of PayPal to cover the cost of equipment and bandwidth.